Class Agenda #9- This I Believe – Analyzing Essays

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Mini-Lesson – I can elaborate in my writing by intermixing context and anecdote.

Read aloud- “A Duty to Family, Heritage and Country” by Ying Ying Yu

As we read-

  • How many anecdotes does this essay contain?
  • How many paragraphs?
  • What’s the most # of sentences in a paragraph? How about the least?
  • What makes this essay a publishable piece?
  • How would you assess Tarak on this rubric?
  • How about this rubric?

Class Work- Class Agenda #9, 9/16

Read “Thirty Things I Believe” by Tarak McClein

  • How many anecdotes does this essay contain?
  • How many paragraphs?
  • What’s the most # of sentences in a paragraph? How about the least?
  • What makes this essay a publishable piece?
  • How would we assess Tarak on this rubric?
  • How about this rubric?

Read “Finding the Flexibility to Survive” by Brighton Earely 

  • How many anecdotes does this essay contain?
  • How many paragraphs?
  • What’s the most # of sentences in a paragraph? How about the least?
  • What makes this essay a publishable piece?
  • How would we assess Brighton on this rubric?
  • How about this rubric?

 

Homework- Finish your Classwork

  1. Ask yourself, “how does your essay stack up against the essays we’re reading in class?” Consider beginning your revision process.
  2. In The Comment Section- Write if your had a good or bad day, and support yourself with a short anecdote.

 

Supplemental-

  1. One ore more articles will come from me AFTER 240 PM, via the #validus
  2. React to at least one of the articles in a tweet.

SLT-

I can use technology to publish original work and responsibly collaborate with an online community. (W6)

42 thoughts on “Class Agenda #9- This I Believe – Analyzing Essays

  1. fatoumata

    Today was a bad day for me, because I stayed in bed all day since I sprained my ankle. However, I went to the hospital and they said to take medicine, I will be fine but I don’t like the fact that I am on crutches. Anyways, I was happy that I can still be responsible for myself by going on the website to do the classwork and homework.

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  2. angel

    today was a ok day it could have been better i did learn how to see and find the context and anecdote now that i know that i can use this information and use it in my future writting.

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  3. Angelique

    today was a bad day for me, because im sick and in school with mu head hurting. However i’ve been taking medicine but its really not working. i would love to feel better but i know its going to take sometime.

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  4. Faith Ruiz

    Today was a good day. I participated in Fitness class which was a huge boost of energy for me, I also feel like it is going to be a great year. I’m going to work hard.

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  5. Katherine Guzman

    Today was a bad day for me, because since I slept late last night this whole day I was so sleepy during the classes. During second period class my head started to hurt alot and it did not stop hurting. Today I had too much work to do and I just felt so tired the whole day.

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  6. Kaylie Morales

    My day was okay
    When I woke up I didn’t know it was raining so I put the wrong sneakers on which was horrible but I still felt happy. I walked into school and remembered I had weight room first period , my shoes are still wet , I went to my locker and got my change of clothes and on my way down I almost fell down the stairs which was embarrassing but at the end of the day I still felt happy .

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  7. Rosalva Rivera

    Today was an unusual day, not as good as other days of this week. I woke up and got ready for school but then I realized it was raining. When I got outside it began to rain really hard but I did not have an umbrella. I tried to buy one buy but I couldn’t find one. A few minutes after I realized I was already late for school and I decided to take a taxi. The taxi driver got lost in the middle of the way and made me more late for school. After school I decided to take out my phone and noticed that it did not want to turn on, I was worried and upset. Today was not really a good day, I hope I have a better day tomorrow.

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  8. Tyerell Norman

    Today was a pretty average day it could have gone, better starting with a rude awakening, then I was late for school with the disgusting rain and i cant forget i how i had and arguement with a close friend todayover something so simple and petty, hopefully tomorrow will be better i guess.

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  9. rosangel polanco

    Today was a chilled day , When i was on my way to school this morning i was really upset because it was raining but then it got really pretty outside so me and my friends had fun after school and nobody got on my last nerves so it was just chillen

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  10. Emmanuel Candelario

    There are many aspects of today’s day that leads to me having a great day. It all started during crew when I was notified that I will be officially going on the wilderness trip with the freshman’s. After crew I headed to Murphy’s class and had a great discussion with Braylin, we debated on many laws and rules. Then, in trig Ms Mckoy was calling on me a lot, I love when he calls on me. After Lunch Drama came and I had to act a scene, during the scene I couldn’t stop laughing but I did a good job. At the end of the day I stayed extra time to play running bases with my baseball team and I was one of the last ones to get out. I wish everyday goes like today did.

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  11. Fatou Gakou

    Today, my day went great. In my gym class, we worked out at the weight room. My partner, Tyreke, and I did the workouts together. We accomplished 100 leg lifts, 100 squats, and 100 jumping jacks. When we were tired and almost gave up, deen motivated eachother that we got this and will make it to the end.

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  12. Ariagna Reyes

    Today was just like my other days. It went smooth. I had fitness first period and was working out with Mr. Lomusico. I was so tired I felt like crawling inside my bed and falling asleep. After I had Ms. Gabor, Lord I don’t understand anything that women teaches. Crew made my day when I saw Hawa beat up Amadu because he kept bothering her. It was the most funniest thing I have seen. After lunch I had McKoy for trigonometry. I was excited because I knew how to solve the problems even though the class is always talking about things nobody cares about and he kept stoping every five seconds as if they care. This day was pretty normal.

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  13. Giraliz Grullon

    Today was a perfect good day for me. Even though it was raining And i was late to school. My day was great, i was Happy because I was in dance class And I learned the dance moves.

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  14. Marieya Jawara

    Today was actually a bad day for me. I went to school as usual and as I was on my way to school the rain got inside my shoe, I was so mad I didn’t feel like do any of my work but I had to, and to top it all of when I was on my way home I got a migraine.

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  15. Veronica Alvarado

    Today was a good day for me because I had a great work out and gym class and my friend Julissa made me laugh because we were throwing the ball at Each other and she didn’t really know how to do it and she just looked funny as we were working out so I kept laughing and when I went to go catch the weight ball it almost fell on my foot cause she kept throwing it wrong but we had fun and it was a great work out .

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  16. Johana Molina

    Today was an ok day because when I found out this morning it was raining, I was so upset cause I didn’t bring an umbrella. I went back and my sister through it from the 5 floor window. Walked to school and I almost fell of slippery floor. I had Mr.Murphy class and he made my day with the jokes that he said. So the day go on until Mr.lomusico and had a great workout with him but other than that It was ok.

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  17. NASSIR

    My day was a really…. day.But the rain vanish my whole plan for the day after i woke up i couldn’t do anything specially(soccer practice,read the Qouran, etc) wasn’t awesome at all.

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  18. Hope Ruiz

    Today was a pretty good day,in the beginning I thought it was going to be the opposite; since I highly dislike the rain. I had thought today was going to be a bad day because usually when it is raining and gloomy, I feel lazy and gloomy.

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  19. Wilfried Folaranmi

    I had an okay day, for seven year’s in a row on this day It has rained but it didn’t affect any of my plan’s.

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  20. Nelson

    Today was a chill day like always it was raining but i did not let that mess up my day it turned out to be a pretty good day spend time with my friends and talk about what has been happening and make jokes.

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  21. Hawa Conteh

    Today was a good day unlike the usual rainy days it was fun because when I was at weight room all I was doing was talking with my friends, and I didn’t even get in trouble, or get told to be quiet while I was doing my work.

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  22. Machiami Kamara

    Today was a long and horrible day for me. First I was late to school because it was raining and I didn’t know. I tried to buy an umbrella but couldn’t find one. I had an allergic reaction but I don’t know to what later on in the day. I sat in the nurse’s office for 3 periods straight for fear my allergic reaction will worsen. Also, I didn’t get to eat lunch. All in all, if it wasn’t for these events, today would’ve been a restful day.

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  23. Erick Leon

    Today was a sort of a good day for me. The rain in the morning set the mood for the day in my opinion but overall today was any other usual day. I was ready for school like any other day and felt as the day went fast

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  24. Elly

    Today wasn’t the best nor a good day ,it was a usually nornal a okay day . I woke up to rain in the morning but however that really didn’t affect me . On my way walking to school i go threw the park and I almost slip but I just walked it off to not make it obvious. Rain reminds me when I was smaller I use to run in the rain to get wet for fun and then get screamed for disobeying. I like that Most of my teachers have a sense of humor because like that I stay focus and awake. I had a alright day and hopefully tommorow is surprising but a better day

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  25. Bernice Boateng

    I had a bad day . Woke up this morning super tired cause I continuously wake up everyday at 2 then I chat fall sleep again . I walked outside and it started raining very hard , I had to run upstairs and get my umbrella . Murphy class was fun so it sorta cheered me up . I just had a horrible day I didn’t smile at all today.

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  26. Yasmin Amin

    well today was an okay day for me not entirely good and had touches of bad in it,I was happy it rained though! Which was the reason why it started off as a good day and ended as an okay one. I just hope tomorrow will be better

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  27. alexandermelo717

    Today i had a great day. Today was raining and had a good mood overall. I learned alot.today. Afterschool was very fun . I spend time programming and drinking coffee witch is the best combo ever. Cant wait for tomorrow And what new adventures it brings.

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  28. Marc Ramirez

    Today was a peaceful day, considering my options of limited answers I would say “today was a good day. Nothing spontaneous happened at school today and on the bus I was able to find a seat which was surprising considering the amount of people that were on the bus. Then I can home took a 2 hour nap, I was glad I wasn’t disturbed.

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  29. Arianna Mendoza

    I had a good day at school today. I came to school early this morning even though it was raining so hard that I thought I was going to be late. The bus dm was so packed today just like every other day but since it was raining it was even more packed. I ended up getting on the bus and getting to my first period in time with my breakfast. My mood started changing through the day because te weather I hate the rain but then the sun ended up coming out and I was all if a suden happy. After school was with my fiends in front of the school playing baseball.

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  30. Charles Crespo

    In the beginning and the middle of today, it was bad because I didn’t know it was raining. I have allergies every morning. When I go to the MPR in the morning, I feel like I lost my skills when I start shooting a basketball to the hoops. Also, it’s weird because I haven’t been to the gym for two months and a few days of no school and forgotten about the ceiling since I shoot the ball high when going to the park. When Mr. Mckoy gave me a math worksheet to do in order to prepare me for the trig regent, it was hard for me to factor something like trinomials, but using letters and not numbers. In the end of today, it was good because I wanted to go home and I got excited when having weight room with Mr. Lomuscio. In addition, the period was getting close to the end of my day. Time goes quick, which I enjoy because I wanted to relax in my house until school comes by tomorrow since it’s always a short day for me like I start at 8:20 and I end at 2:40.

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  31. El Freddy

    Today was a delightful day. Not a lot of homework and everyone today seemed chill and peaceful unlike any other day when everyone is wild. I was also able to take a short relaxing nap without being disturbed.

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  32. Catherine Larbi 👑🐝

    Today was alright, wasn’t good it wasn’t bad. So this morning I flat iron my hair, as I’m getting ready to step out my door to go to school I see that It was drizzling, I went back into my house to wrap my hair and put on a hoodie because Jessica lost my umbrella. I’m going to school just hoping that my hair doesn’t get frizzy. As I get to school I go to Lomuscio’s office/cube to brush my hair. The good about today was crew where Hawa beat up Amadu, laughing at Arianga, and the Bathgate basketball tryouts/practice/workouts. Watching my friends play three on three was pretty entertaining, mostly everybody did a good job. Then 20 minutes after the workouts my day went slightly downhill from there.

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  33. Michael D

    Today I had a good day. I went to school and forgot my cleansing water which got me mad. However when I came home I went to get a haircut and then felt much better. The start of my day was bad but now I look and feel good.

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  34. Joveair Brice

    Today I had a fairly good day. Last period while going threw one of the essays, me and two of my classmates couldn’t believe that thirty one sentence paragraphs were published. If I want my paper published I know I gotta say I’m 14 years old.

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  35. Eufranny Castillo

    Today was actually an okay day. The rain this morning wasn’t so amusing. However, I did have alot of laughs today. In trig I was kind of annoyed because Mckoy wouldn’t go away. He was always coming towards me telling me to hurry up. In gym Lomuscio let me sit and do nothing because I was in pain. Then afterschool was pretty interesting and funny. Today was just a very chill day.

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  36. Julissa Chalas

    Today was such a productive day ,I feel like I accomplished multiple things today. I never let school get to me ,because when I think about it ,I think about the memories I create with my friends & I don’t like missing out on that.Also, got some good exercise done in the weight room ,went to work and still manage to complete all my homework assignments.

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  37. hilaryc16

    Today was a weird day for me. First if all, I woke up and saw sun. 5 minutes later I see the sky so gray. I went late to class which I’m not proud of and felt really tired. Then the sun came out on mid-day and I got all happy. I realized that the weather affects my mood.

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  38. Jackie

    My day started off okay. I was able to wake up again to see a beautiful sunset (Thanks to God). But then I had these classes, I didn’t like how my day went in any of my classes. Though it changed my mood for while but that didn’t stop me from turning up like the usual Jackie. Am always happy with my self, because not everybody gets to see another day. After school I had a fun time with my friends. Then lucky me the bus that I toke home was limited and I got home safe.

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  39. Amadu

    Today was a good day for me because even though I was talking in class I have all of my work comoleted, this shows that I know how to multitadk .

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  40. sashay erazo

    Today was a very hectic day. It consisted of rain which makes me feel very tired and lazy and when I was in the middle of my government class Mrs.Bruck was so kind to bless me with a new schedule I type this with all sarcasm.

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